Moles

Apr 18, 2016 20:15
Today, I will talk about moles.

Basically, moles dig a tunnel in the soil and live in there.

Since there is almost no sunlight in the soil, moles' eyesight have atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.

Instead, since their senses of smell and hearing have evolved, they can figure objects ' shape out by smells and sounds.

Also, since moles are a big eater, they seem to starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.

By the way, it's said that the moles' digging speed is similar to the speed of snails.

I feel that their lives are tough.
モグラ

今日はモグラについて話します。

モグラは基本的に、土の中にトンネルをほってそこで生活しています。

土中は光が入ってこないため、モグラの視力は退化しており、ほとんど何も見えていません。

その代わり嗅覚と聴覚がとても発達しており、臭いや音で物体を立体的に把握することができます。

また、モグラは大食漢で、胃の中に12時間以上食物が無いと餓死するそうです。

モグラが穴を掘るスピードはカタツムリ程度だそうなので、毎日大変そうです。
No. 1　Timmy's correction
  • Since there is almost no sunlight in the soil, moles' eyesight have atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.
  • Since there is almost no sunlight underground, moles' eyesight have atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.
  • Also, since moles are a big eater, they seem to starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.
  • Also, since moles are big eaters, they seem to starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.
> I feel that their lives are tough.

At least they are not ugly compared to other species living underground.
Toru
Thank you so much always for correcting my post!
For sure, they look cute :)
Timmy
You're welcome!^_^
No. 2　dwparker's correction
  • Moles
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Today, I will talk about moles.
  • Today I will talk about moles.
  • Basically, moles dig a tunnel in the soil and live in there.
  • Basically, moles dig a tunnel in the soil and live there.
  • Since there is almost no sunlight in the soil, moles' eyesight have atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.
  • Since there is almost no sunlight in the soil, a moles' eyesight has atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.
  • Instead, since their senses of smell and hearing have evolved, they can figure objects ' shape out by smells and sounds.
  • Instead, since their sense of smell and hearing has evolved, they can figure out an object's shape by how it smells and sounds.
  • Also, since moles are a big eater, they seem to starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.
  • Also, since moles are big eaters, they starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.
  • By the way, it's said that the moles' digging speed is similar to the speed of snails.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I feel that their lives are tough.
  • I think that their lives are tough.
Toru
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No. 3　Patrick's correction
  • Basically, moles dig a tunnel in the soil and live in there.
  • Basically, moles dig a tunnels in the soil and live in there.
  • Since there is almost no sunlight in the soil, moles' eyesight have atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.
  • Since there is almost no sunlight in the soil, moles' eyesight have atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.
  • Instead, since their senses of smell and hearing have evolved, they can figure objects ' shape out by smells and sounds.
  • Instead, since their senses of smell and hearing have evolved, they can figure oubjects the' shapes of objecuts by smells and sounds.
  • Also, since moles are a big eater, they seem to starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.
  • Also, since moles are a big eaters, they seem to starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.
  • By the way, it's said that the moles' digging speed is similar to the speed of snails.
  • By the way, it's said that the moles' digging speed is similar to the speed of snails.
Toru
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No. 4　Kwang Ming (クアン　ミン）'s correction
  • Today, I will talk about moles.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Basically, moles dig a tunnel in the soil and live in there.
  • Basically, all moles do are to dig tunnels and live there.
    　There's a certain amount of amusement when you attach 'basically'. In that case, you may as well add 'all' for further emphasis.

    The preposition can be dropped because it's understood.
  • Since there is almost no sunlight in the soil, moles' eyesight have atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.
  • Since there is almost no sunlight to be had underground, the eyes of moles have atrophied, and they can see almost nothing.
    　Write it this way.

    Also, while their eyesight is poor, I think if you are going to use atrophy, it's best to refer to the mole's eyes as they are rudimentary.
  • Instead, since their senses of smell and hearing have evolved, they can figure objects ' shape out by smells and sounds.
  • Instead, since their senses of smell and hearing have evolved, moles use them to accurately discern the shape of objects.
    　No need to repeat smell and sound again.

    Discern = to tell the difference = a good vocabulary word in this context.
  • Also, since moles are a big eater, they seem to starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.
  • Also, since moles are a big eaters, they will likely starve to death if they don't eat anything for twelve hours.
  • By the way, it's said that the moles' digging speed is similar to the speed of snails.
  • By the way, it's said that a mole's digging speed is similar to a snail's.
    　Singular comparisons feel more natural. (for english at least)
  • I feel that their lives are tough.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
Sometimes I think animals can't get a sense of whether their lives are 'tough'. They do feel emotions of course, but aside from mating, eating and resting, I doubt that they understand their existence properly.
Toru
Thank you very much always for correcting my post!
Hmm, I guess you have a point. Animals might just react to living creature's survival instinct.
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